Rachel Chizever's review

Name of Reviewed Individual: Rachel Chizever

1. What are the strengths of your partner’s essay? Why?

--Rachel’s essay was very easy to understand and the events she described were organized and went in order well.

2. What areas could use improvements? In other words, what suggestions can you give

your partner that will help his/her paper improve?

--I would suggest just describing some of the bigger event in detail, like her cutting her foot. And use more descriptive words.

3. What is your favorite literary device used in your partner’s essay?

--My favorite literary device that was used in this essay was amplification.

4. What is the part of the paper that stands out as the most "catchy" or important?

--The most catchy part was that Rachel really just through me into the story and made me want to know what happen in Hilton Head.

Narrative Questions

includes detailed observations of people, places, and events.
--My Narrative does include details of certain events.

Do you recall sights, sounds, smells, tactile feelings, and tastes? Use actual or re-created dialogue? Give actual names of people and places.

--I give actual names of people and places in my story.  The dialogue in my story needs to be changed, I just tell what the say not throwing it in the story.

Do you grow from change? Is there a conflict between characters? Is there a contrast between the past and the present?

--There is definitely a contrast in past in present, I based my whole narrative off of that. 

--It is told from my point of view.

focuses on connection between past events, people, or places and the present. How relevant is the event today? How relevant will it be in your future?

--This event happened this year so it is pretty relevant today. And I think it will help me in the future to never give up.

Helen Keller

1. What did you think of this narrative?
-I thought it was really interesting how she was able to learn new things just by the spelling of the letters on her hand, and feeling the object.  It was very humbling.
2. What was most interesting or engaging about it?
-The most interesting part was to think about what I would do if i was in that situation and how I would react.

3. What surprised you?
-It suprised me that she was able to connect things together and eventually learned how to string words together without hearing.

4. Did this change your outlook on Helen Keller at all? Why or why not?
-No. we learned about Helen Keller in the years before so I already knew this story.

5. Copy and paste three examples of vivid detail and imagery that helped enhance the story
a) Have you ever been at sea in a dense fog, when it seemed as if a tangible white darkness shut you in, and the great ship, tense and anxious, groped her way toward the shore with plummet and sounding-line, and you waited with beating heart for something to happen?
b)I was like that ship before my education began, only I was without compass or sounding-line, and had no way of knowing how near the harbour was.
c)That living word awakened my soul, gave it light, hope, joy, set it free! There were barriers still, it is true, but barriers that could in time be swept away.

6. How can a narrative be more engaging than something like a biography? Why is it important to get someone's personal perspective?
-A narrative is more engaging than a biography because a biography is mainly all facts harder to read.  A narrative has taken facts and put them into an interesting story.

7. Make a bulltted lists of some things you could write a narrative about
-Lossing states
-Winning states
-family trips
-first day of school
-the drivers test
-pre-season

Where I'm From

I am from Sunday mornings

rolling out of bed to the sent of cinnamon rolls

from cheering on the Browns on

until the clock strikes zero

I am from Sunday dinner spaghetti, salad and breadsticks

I am from a car packed full for a 12 hour drive

from scorching hot sand

And foamy sea water

I am from thunderstorms rolling off the east coast

From a Carolina shore

That feels like home

I am from the Rolling Stones

Blaring through the speakers,

From shouting Tom Petty at the top of my lungs

I am from a moon dance

With Van Morrison

To Jimmy Buffett wishing for a pencil thin mustache

I am from backyard whiffle ball games

A home run over the Freakers fence

I am from the morning dew on the ice cold field

From sideline to sideline

From shot to goal

I am from stinging scraps and bluish black bruises

I am from creaky wooden cabins

musty lake water and canoe rides on the lake

I am from long hilly hikes

With a refreshing lake at the end

from a bear cave hidden in the trees of Tippecanoe

and the love of a camp friend

I am from sibling rivalry

From screechy shouting matches through the hallways

I am from bunk beds and grandma’s teddy bears

From a tent in the back yard to sledding down the family hill

I am from loving parents

From my sisters and brothers

I am from the family at the end of the court

survey

1.  Do you enjoy English classes?  Why or why not?

--I like english class because there is no right or wrong anwser

 2.  What type of writing do you enjoy?  Write all that apply:

Poetry

Recipes

Lists

Notes to friends

Letters

Directions

Autobiography

Other